Emily-
I really enjoyed reading your paper, I think you have great ideas. I would just recommend making transitions from paragraph to paragraph. I would also elaborate on the texting aspect of your paper, I really enjoyed reading what you wrote about it so far. Overall I think that you meet the requirements for the assignment and it's a great start to your paper. Keep up the great work!
-Amanda
http://www.scribd.com/doc/79048851/Paper-Peer-Revised
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